IOC Prep

OMG I can't believe how many times I said "um" and "uh"

Recording:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-QTgXjJ_TrrcGxuYUNWYm1yYlExLXV2UDFQX2xHT3JwVUZr

Preparation:






















Grade:
A-7
I think I showed good knowledge and understanding of the text, and I tried to cite specific evidence.
B-7
I think I discussed structure a lot. I didn't discuss style much, though.
C-4
I think I created a structure for my commentary, but I think I rambled a bit.
D-3
I might be judging myself too harshly on this one, but the "um"s and "uh"s distracted me a lot. I also used a lot of "and so"s. I think looking at other examples will help clarify to me what this criterion is supposed to look like.

Comments

  1. Lauren GeneskyFebruary 26, 2017 at 3:55 PM

    Jessica:
    I think that you came to one of my after school sessions, so much of what I would suggest would be redundant. You are spot on with your feedback and I don't really have any significant concerns. Review the IOC materials I've given in class, but I do think you'll knock it out of the park!

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